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Thursday, November 24, 2016

The dream giver

  
The Dream Giver
He looks like a fly,
He sounds like bee!
He moves as old guy'
When he enters a room children are sleeping /and quiet.

2 comments:

  1. Kia ora it's Zoey from Gilberthorpe School.
    I like the way that you said he sounds like a bee.
    Maybe next time you could check your poem before you publish it.
    I love the fact that you have said that the kids were asleep.

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  2. Hi
    Its Keisha
    I love your Smillies!

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