Slowly and cautiously, he raised his small, curious face above the ground, just as he did every morning. His shiny, black eyes surveyed the scene in front and around him, checking that the coast was clear for the start of the breakfast expedition.
Suddenly, he saw it…Sitting there right in front of him. His eyes widened, transfixed on the sight he saw in front of him, and his jaw dropped open in astonishment. Was it really there? Were his eyes playing tricks on him?
Abruptly, he awoke, as if he had been caught in a dream. Twitching his whiskers, he realised that he had to act NOW, unless he was to miss his chance… He quickly ran at it at top speed before the other mouse took the piece of fruit. He quickly got it and ran back to his den and hide from the other mouse and also hide the food. Luckily the other mouse didn't see where the mouse went. He slowly nibiled the piece of fruit then popped his head up of his den to make the other mouse had gone so he could get a drink of water and go back to sleep.
The end
Blog you later.
Hello Shikarn.
ReplyDeleteI like you story you use great pankswasn.
is this story real.
you could use a little more fullstop.
Kia ora Shikarn i like this writing about the suprised mouse this is so cool you put alot of efort on doing that look how many words there are this cool #AWESOME-CHRISTINA
ReplyDeleteki ora shirkarn nice work on this you are really smart this is a great story . great work c how did you do it good job .
ReplyDeleteHi Shikarn,
ReplyDeleteI like your story it is really cool!
And you knocked my socks off by all of these cool words!
Next time you could put a couple images!!!!
BYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
hi it it a Surprised for me too just like the Mouse.
ReplyDeleteWOW Shikarn I love your writing.
ReplyDeleteHow long did it take you?
Did you know you are very good at your writing.
Next time you can add Images.
bye
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Shikarn!
Ka Pai on doing such a good job on writing!
What are you doing next?
Bye for now!
Thankyou so much for giveing me a nice and positive comment
Deletehi there it's kian here and i like your blog and maybe abit more infomation
ReplyDeleteThanks for your nice and usefull comment
DeleteKia ora Shikarn.
ReplyDeleteGreat job.
You could even make a chapter book or something, and great words.
Bye for now.
Thanks for your nice and positive comment.
DeleteHi Shikarn, it's Hunter from Whakamanawa. I like how you started off the story with slowly and cautiously. This reminds me of my writing play because it is in the same color. Some advice is to tell us the hardest thing about your post. That's all from me BLOG YOU LATER!!!
ReplyDeleteThankd for the nice and helpfull reply
DeleteKia Ora Shikarn, This is really great, I like the way you said "Slowly and cautiously" how long did it take you to write this? Was this free writing or did you get the topic to? I also like the way you did "..." Well that's all from me, Bye
ReplyDeleteThanks for the nice and helpfull reply
DeleteKia ora Shikarn Great job on the capital letters and full stops in thing you have improved blog you later
ReplyDeleteThanks for nice and wonderfull reply Latoyia.
DeleteHi Shikarn, it's dylan from Whakamanawa. I like how you started off the story with slowly and cautiously. Some advice is to tell us the hardest thing about your post. That's all from me BLOG YOU LATER!!!
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